Sun's ever burning flame,
smoulders on horizon,
sunrays kiss morning dew,
shinning white pearly hue,
soothing eyes, heart, mind, soul,
showering warmth, love, care,
soaring the skies high.
Pleiades: 7 line poem with 6 syllables per line. Title is of one word only. First letter of title and every line is the same.
34 comments:
A good new form, good to try! Not too difficult it appears to be. The sun with all its goodness! Great lines Vandana!
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This is wonderful, Vandana. The sun's warmth brings joy to our days. Great prompt. I will be writing later today.
Such soaring, and smoothly spectacular sentences!
form & content both amazing Vandana...love how the sun is sketched as the symbol of warmth, love and joy...a beautiful write :)
The sun is ever showering us with warmth, love and care ~
Hey, we both wrote the same star, smiles ~ Thanks for guest hosting today ~
wonderful.. I love the sun .. alas it's getting rare up in the north .. what a good challenge you give us.
the sun is a wonderful companion, sharing that warmth with us...it makes me feel alive when the first rays of spring caress my face....for a small form this was a bit challenging....just got mine done...and looking forward to you hosting...you will do a great job...smiles.
So much said in just a few lines....beautifully done!
Sometimes brevity leads to strict parameters, but I love the original essence of this form, before the syllable count was added; but this is an amazingly creative debut for you as guest host; welcome aboard, & may we see you there often.
Groovy piece.
You've chosen a lovely image to go with your poem. Thanks for this prompt, Vandana, a completely new form to me.
Your words are the perfect accompaniment for the image you chose for your topic, Vandana. Beautiful work and thank you for bringing us such a neat form and hosting, too. :)
Beautifully done and the image you chose is wonderful. Great prompt, kiddo!
Great way to start as a host, and I love the form for it's unique way of passing on a thought...
Oh, this is beautiful.I am trying to work up my courage to join in...lovely form...
Excellent use of form. I enjoyed doing it. Thanks for the prompt.
This is full of warmth and hope. I enjoyed this form it worked well. Thank you for hosting.
Loved this, especially the first two lines and the internal rhyme of 3 & 4. We need more smoldering heat! Nicely done.
I'll be honest I read your poem tonight before I set to work on my own. You set the poetic bar so high that I knew all that was left to do was have fun with the form. Thank you so much for teaching me this fun form.
I feel the peace in this, as though you were content as you were writing
I really enjoyed the form, Vandana--thank you! And yours is just lovely.
fun form
without sun where we will be?? nice lines that appreciate him..smiles..loved it
A lovely poem, though for some readon the typeface was not easy to read. I think my eyes are deranged!
Burning and calm and steady--a paradox explained only by distance--or we would know at once the origin of forest fires. Nicely done.
Your words are the embodiment of warmth!
nicely done... cool picture
Beautiful, and the picture you paired with it is also lovely.
This is beautiful! And I really like the way the name of the form makes your title look like "Sun Pleads," lending additional meaning to the poem.
Excellent tribute to the sun's effects.
Beautifully written - thanks for sharing this new form with us!
Thank you for the new form, Vandana...I loved your offering. And I apologize for the goof up by me...I'm usually more attentive when trying something new.
O god, I feel warmed up here, thanks Vandana! Beautiful poem, nice form, thanks!
Beautiful, warm as the sun, makes me feel good :)
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