Unrequited
Tilted emotions
of a contemplating heart
an unending wait
Reciprocated
Heart with soul merges
flowery spring forever
happiness abound
Abandoned
Left in sorrow, pain
broken, withered, bleeding hearts
lost, abandoned souls
Japanese poetry form: 5/7/5 syllables per line.
18 comments:
Oh my gosh Vandana... that last part about being abandoned was sad... very well written
This feels like seasons of the year.. does love always follow such cycles?
Follows logical process most appropriately Vandana! Love is held back not really sure, got entangled and happiness abound but faced testing times later with some tears! Great lines!
Hank
Feels like you have just described seasons of love, some blooming.. while others wilting.! Well penned :D
Lots of love,
Sanaa
a heart scorned them. i envision so much of that lately.
nice !
gracias
Now we need some winter redemption!
i luv happy, yet the Abandonded souls tugged at my heart today; the really good ones
have a nice Tuesday
much love...
This work weeps pathos and tragedy. Just brilliant.
The illustration seems perfectly chosen for these verses.
You capture the shadows and the bright light of love.
I love the contrasts in your haiku, the different meanings behind the same word.
I specially like the second haiku, flowering spring & happiness ~
Beautiful. The first was my favorite...the contemplating heart!
I love the poem, and I love Bjorn's comment! Beautiful! <3
I loved the poem, and I loved Bjorn's comment. Beautiful! :)
I really enjoy the idea of love in different colors, which in turn are called something else. Love can be so mysterious...
one of my favourite forms! Well crafted!
Each one tells its own story, but put together like this, they tell a complete story. Brilliantly woven.
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