I hold the corner of gale’s veil,
towards the starlit sky I sail,
flying above the hill and vale,
to the stars I find my
way.
I cross the dazzling northern lights,
shining forever brilliant bright,
such enchanting beautiful sight,
and there I find my star.
The
Ovi is: 12 th century Marathi folksong
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stanzaic, written in any number of 4 line stanzas.
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syllabic, 8-8-8-(less than 8 ) syllables
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rhymed, with L1, L2, L3 mono-rhymed L4 unrhymed. aaax, x being unrhymed.
25 comments:
what a beautiful, dreamy write!
Both of us looking to the stars, this day. Looking to find my star, too. Lovely, Vandana. (A very, hectic week for me - called in on Nana babysitting duty - but I shall endeavor to "catch up" a bit tomorrow, as things seem to be getting back to normal ... ha, whatever that is.)
Nice. It would be cool to be among the stars. I watched interstellar over the weekend as well and the love he had for his daughter and desire to reach her beyond all limits...plays well with your verse.
Vandanna,
Such poetic scope for an imagination to fly free..Beautiful words..
Eileen
May the star be the perfect guide :-)
I love the movement and light in this poem - beautifully captivating..i hope we all find our stars
Looking into the starry night I am sure there is star for each one of us. Beautifully written Vandana.
You often times come with lots of new forms. Part educational it is, Vandana! To please have the fonts larger in the explanations. Thanks
Hank
I would like to someday find my star ~ Very nice rhyming pattern ~
This is so dreamy!! Beautiful write :D
The stars always lead the way! Lovely writing, Vandana.
beautiful writing Vandana...
luv the concept of "finding your star"
have a nice Sunday
much love...
Oh, can I come along? This is gorgeous.
Beautifully written, my friend.
Perfect as this reads like a folksong....beautiful image with such vivid words.
Made me smile and I will look among the stars tonight to see yours :-)
ZQ
Thanks for this introduction to the Ovi....yours is beautiful :-)
Thank you for introducing us to the Ovi. I ma always interested in new (to me) forms. You have used it beautifully. (I spotted a typo, though. You have 'shinning' instead of 'shining'. Also I wonder if you mean 'sight' rather than 'site'.)
This is nice. I like the imagery you incorprated into this song. Beautiful!
Very well penned, Vandana :)
A very beautiful song you've written.
I love that, ' to the stars I find my way'. Very beautiful writing, Vandana :)
What a treat to read it is. Lovely poetry, Vandana....
Enchanting!
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