A valley of flowers up the hills,
spreads fragrance all over.
Butterflies and bees, flying with ease,
on the herbs of thyme and clover.
As winter starts to wrap,
mist flows back to clouds,
flying with ease, butterflies and bees,
green meadows unfurl their shrouds.
Days turning cozy and bright
sun smiling, rays twinkling,
butterflies and bees, flying with
ease,
golden dust all over sprinkling.
Spring at the edge, sings a tender
song,
melodies scatter beyond,
flying with ease, butterflies and
bees,
in a rhythmic tune dance lakes and pond.
The
ZaniLa Rhyme : Created by
Laura Lamarca, and consists of at least 3, 4 line stanzas. The rhyme scheme is abcb and a syllable count 9/7/9/9 per stanza. Line 3 contains
internal rhyme ,requires minimum of 3 stanzas .
29 comments:
You have really whetted my appetite for spring, Vandana. I love all the signs of spring you have described so well in this poem. I am waiting for the days to turn cozy and bright.
wow....you nailed it. I always want to try my hand at these repeating things...but I never seem to find the time to devote to it.
An interesting poem that I enjoyed reading. Well done.
Thank you. Love love, Andrew. Bye.
I love the fluidity in your words :) Another beautiful poem!
What a lovely form and the spring theme is melodious ~ I do wish for it come faster as we are in the darkness of winter ~
Grace
Ah this sounds nice...butterflies and bees long for that! :)
Beautiful.
A spring poem that delights one when reading it!
Excellent Vandana I loved the poem, great ideas.
oh i long to see those butterflies and bees again...listening to the song of spring... sigh
Repeating forms are great fun to use. This one is hopeful for Spring.
Great use of the form, Vanadana! I enjoyed the scene you portrayed and the serenity of your spring poem.
Very interesting Vandana! I could feel the flow most distinctly. Should have to try it some day! Nicely!
Hank
A sweet longing in this.. the bees and butterflies makes me long for those warm days of may.
Very beautiful. This is a lovely form. Your words make me long for spring.
These is a supercool form, with the line reversal, which I've never see before. Thanks for the sweet poem showing it. K.
ah i long for spring....and the warm sun on my face...and the butterflies and flowers...and fresh air....i like this form as well.....
This form is so creative-- and it works so well with your wistful words, one can feel the sing-songiness in your spring anticipation. A lovely moment ~Jason
This is a really cool form. Thanks for introducing it to us! And you wrote a wonderful poem within that form
As so many endure the seemingly never ending Winter, how lovely to covet thoughts of the Spring to come. The form does look interesting, but complex; perhaps we will find it one day as a prompt at dVerse.
Oh, I long for spring and seeing butterflies and bees flying with ease..thanks for the touch of spring..
What a fun rhyme scheme. I picked up the rhythm and how it just helps the poem to flow, to dance really.
Beautifully crafted and it seems effortless in its flow
This is an interesting form, Vandana. And full of images of spring which we in the northern hemisphere are only too eager for. Lovely. We saw some fat sluggish bees just coming awake today - yikes. It's early, for bees.
Just Lovely and engaging! Thanks for a refreshing poem!
Oh! Very nice visual treatment there - love the effect of winter being pushed away, the advent of spring.
Such a charming little poem Vandana :)
i like this a lot
Nature in its all form is so beautiful and you have captured it so well in your write....smiles.
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