Aug 24, 2021

Rhyming Within My Heartbeats

 Rhyming within my heartbeats,

is your love-song,

that I hum every night,

and float into a world,

where,

to each other we belong.

 I am, not me,

my heart and soul devoted to you,

surrendering all desires,

with a faith,

to be,

eternally yours.

       

 

 

25 comments:

kittysverses said...

Enjoyed your poem. Loved the shape of your poem, too. :)

Jane Dougherty said...

This is true. Loving is giving. It comes adrift when it isn't reciprocated.

Gillena Cox said...

Loving also means belonging. This is lovely

Happy you dropped by to read mine

Much❤love

ben Alexander said...

There person you intended this for is very lucky, Vandana - this is stunningly sweet.

Yours,
David [ben Alexander]

Ingrid said...

Exquisitely beautiful!

Alexandra said...

Sometimes form and indents seem arbitrary but you've used it beautifully here--the sense of floating pervades. Lovely.

Dwight L. Roth said...

This is beautifully done! I love it!

Helen said...

Hearts and love ... combining in one wonderful rush! Forever! Well done.

indybev said...


Written in the sand --- heart entwined ... romance personified!

De Jackson said...

Beautiful, and I love how this flows visually, like a heartbeat rising and falling.

Tricia said...

The flow and unity of the two hearts is breathtakingly beautiful! 💕

Dora said...

So lovely!

paeansunplugged said...

Vandana, this is so heart warmingly lovely!

Bill said...

Love this poem. Very well done.

Helen said...

An exquisite poem about hearts / love.

A Reading Writer said...

the "i am not me" line took my breath away. love leaks here.

kaykuala said...

A very interesting declaration Vandana! Extending a 'to love' to a beloved will beget normally a response of 'to be loved' to oneself!

Hank

brudberg said...

what a wonderful way to say it... I hope it is mutual

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Interesting structure.

Cressida de Nova said...

Very romantic....sigh !

purplepeninportland.com said...

Romance is alive and well!

Jim said...

Wouldn't it be loverly (of "My Fair Lady) if all were this way in a romance!!
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Rommy said...

Love sounds best when the music of both hearts know how to harmonize with each other.

Shadow said...

Saaaa-weet *grin* light as love should be

ashok said...

Beautiful words!