Brooke Shaden Photography
I fly above the black space,
to touch my beloved moon,
to feel his cold touch and pace,
and relive this life once more,
under moon’s gentle core,
and relive this life,
and relive this life,
I wish one day soon,
I leave my human form,
and meet my beloved moon,
together with him I’ll roam,
to places far off from earth,
in a realm away from death and birth,
to places far off,
to places far off,
I wish one day, these wishes unearth.
I wish one day soon,
the light shines upon,
glowing my icy moon,
stars smile on and on,
with love and delight.
Light burning upright,
with love,
with love,
I wish one day, everything is bright.
The
Trijan Refrain:
x.
x. x. x. x. x. x. a.
x.
x. x. x. x b.
x.
x. x. x. x. x. x. a.
x.
x. x. x. x. b.
R.
R. R. R. x. x. x. c.
x.
x. x. x. x. x. x. c.
R.
R. R. R.
R.
R. R. R.
x.
x. x. x. x. x. x. c.
25 comments:
Fantastic moon shot and the perfect wishes to go with it.
Thanks for visiting.
hmmm...lovely. I enjoyed the flow of the form and admit I'm a bit jealous of you and the moon.
Oh I love how you find your way to with the moon. What av dreamfilled poem.
lovely, there is a strong connection.
Dreaming of the moon and all its goodness and smoothness from earth's distance makes it a great dream! Wonderful new form Vandana!
Hank
I wish for you, to find your moon, to float your days away in flight.
Poppy
The moon has always charmed and enchanted poets...moonstruck souls do weave dream radiating beauty...
I think we all should try falling in love with the impossible for in our dreams it could come true.
The end result of this painstaking form is very beautiful.
This poem reflects your romantic person as a Poet :D
Loved the sentiments..!
xoxo
What a lovely poem of yearning, Vandana! We all need dreams.
I like how the use of repetitions work in your poem by giving it a soothing rhythm.
I would love it if you tried that form :)
You might be better at it than me :D
Lots of love
xoxo
nice form; lovely wishes; you wish upon a moon
have a nice Sunday
thanks for dropping in to read mine
much love...
I wiish one day we meet on the moon, floating in light. This is a most beautiful poem. It made me feel peaceful.
i love how you made this form flow with a beautiful rhythm! and what poet is not enchanted by the moon?
♥
I love this form! Like a song, chanting to cosmos to follow the moon...a lovely dream!
Beautifully done. The rhyming and repetition works very effectively here.
Thank you for this introduction to the trijan refrain. I had never heard of it before!
i also always wished i cold go to the moon
My Brain is a Cheap Gadget That Spins
Transcendent - the refrain lovely and haunting!
Power! The lines and repetitions show a wish very dear for the life beyond mortality. Scarey/cool. I've never seen the moon as male! But here, as a companion and promise of brightness, that truly works.
Love how you used the form--good job there. It seemed like a song lyric. Thank for visiting my blog.
Well done and with art and talent!
ZQ
Excellent poem. I loved the form used.
Post a Comment