Your quietness,
holding many
voices,
echoing through
mind.
Your quietness,
words sealed
within,
pouring
melancholy.
Your quietness,
seeping in the
mud,
drops of tears.
Your quietness,
deep in heart,
a pearl of the
pacific.
Your quietness,
pondering about
life,
beyond the boundaries.
Your quietness,
the winter snow,
falling on me
softly.
Triversen : An entire poem consisting of 6 stanza
and there is no particular rhyme scheme with it .The concept is to have a
sentence with three phrases with each phrase a line.
15 comments:
So many facets of quietness...esp. love 'words sealed within,
pouring melancholy.' x
Lovely..quiteness very well described...;-)
A wonderful form and beautiful poem. I would put this piece up there with some of your very best work, Vandana.
i have spent a bit more time in the quiet of late...and it is not a bad place to be...
as long as you dont let it take you....
the quiet of snow falling on you...ha...that is a nice touch....
Quietness can well hide spectacular talents that need be released given the proper provocation. Great poetic lines Vandana
Hank
Oh, WOW. And I see how they accumulate into "winter snow." But there is so much beauty in there!
The silence has so many facets.. sometimes a bliss but often it could chill like winter winds.
Sometimes the quietness becomes an entity on its own, sometimes a comfort and at other times, a hindrance.
Beautiful work :)
Just beautiful..!
pearly, beautiful tears in the form of words...
I see a progression that I like here. The tone of the poem seems to be very sad, but the quietness seems to eventually bring some joy.
beautiful Vandana… quietness takes so many forms.
This is so lovely!!
In the quietness, poetic thoughts take shape...I especially like the pearl in the Pacific :)
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